Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime.other,however,argue that the circumstances of an individual crime,and the motivation for committing it,should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Disscuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people view that the
punisment
the act of punishing
punishment
punishments
should be same for each offence while
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
group stated that before decide the
punisment
the act of punishing
punishment
punishments
the judge should
awrare
(sometimes followed by 'of') having or showing knowledge or understanding or realization or perception
aware
about the situation
,
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,
for what purpose they
commited
bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude
committed
crime
.Before commenting my
opinion both
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opinion, both
the
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a way of regarding situations or topics etc.
views
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one of several distinct subdivisions of a text intended to separate ideas; the beginning is usually marked by a new indented line
paragraphs
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the
formost
ranking above all others
foremost
reason is that
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the individual
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an equal right
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receiving
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a similar treat
similar treats
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for example
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no matter what
crime
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criminal
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crime
rate
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should reduce
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if each
person
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for example
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the
person
have
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has
fear
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a fear
before
commited
bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude
committed
any disobedience which harm
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
person
.
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,
the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
view has its own claim.
Firstly
,
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the
person
may be
use
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used
as defence to protect herself from criminals
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such
as the women save herself from the
gengster
a criminal who is a member of gang
gangster
gangsters
who try to
raped
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rape
with
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by
her in
this
case it is not
consider
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considered
as a
crime
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individual commited serious
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an individual committed serious crime
individual committed serious crime
crime
some
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may have
forcendess
such
as
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the boy stole money from
someone
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someone's
someones
pocket for the treatment of her mother so the authority should give
second
chance them for their
guilty
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guilt
. To conclude
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,
it can be eventually stated that both views has its own
claim but
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claim, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
support the
second
point because not each
person
commited
bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude
committed
crime
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the crime
a crime
crimes
for their pleasure
,
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,
fond some may have their
reason
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reasons
.
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