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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime.other,however,argue that the circumstances of an individual crime,and the motivation for committing it,should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Disscuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Some people view that the
punisment
the act of punishing
punishment
punishments
 should be same for each offence while
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 group stated that before decide the
punisment
the act of punishing
punishment
punishments
 the judge should
awrare
(sometimes followed by 'of') having or showing knowledge or understanding or realization or perception
aware
 about the situation
,
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,
for what purpose they
commited
bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude
committed
crime
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.Before commenting my
opinion both
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opinion, both
 the
viwes
a way of regarding situations or topics etc.
views
 are discussed in
further
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paragrph
one of several distinct subdivisions of a text intended to separate ideas; the beginning is usually marked by a new indented line
paragraphs
.
Body paragraph 1
Focusing on the former view
,
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,
the
formost
ranking above all others
foremost
 reason is that
individual
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the individual
 has
equal right
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an equal right
 for
receive
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receiving
similar treat
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a similar treat
similar treats
,
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,
for example
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,
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,
no matter what
crime
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 they do but they known as a
criminals
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criminal
.
Secondy
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Secondly
,
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,
The
crime
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 rate
should be reduce
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should reduce
should be reduced
 if each
person
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 punished by
same way
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the same way
,
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,
for example
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,
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,
the
person
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have
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has
fear
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a fear
 before
commited
bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude
committed
 any disobedience which harm
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
person
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.
Body paragraph 2
However
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,
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,
the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
 view has its own claim.
Firstly
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,
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,
the
person
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 may be
use
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used
 as defence to protect herself from criminals
,
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,
such
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 as the women save herself from the
gengster
a criminal who is a member of gang
gangster
gangsters
 who try to
raped
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rape
with
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by
 her in
this
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 case it is not
consider
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considered
 as a
crime
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.
Moreover
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,
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,
Not
individual commited serious
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an individual committed serious crime
individual committed serious crime
crime
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 some
may be have
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may have
forcendess
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such
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 as
,
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,
the boy stole money from
someone
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someone's
someones
 pocket for the treatment of her mother so the authority should give
second
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 chance them for their
guilty
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guilt
.
Conclusion
To conclude
,
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,
it can be eventually stated that both views has its own
claim but
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claim, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 support the
second
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 point because not each
person
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commited
bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude
committed
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crime
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the crime
a crime
crimes
 for their pleasure
,
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,
fond some may have their
reason
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reasons
.
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.

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