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every society is suffering from some evils. which evil is prevalent in your society? what are its causes and how can it be solved?

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The World has undergone a sea change. On one side we are enjoying a glory of advancements and
on the other hand
 world is facing a number of threats. One
such
 big menace is drug addiction. It is engulfing the
society
 in dangerous ways. Let us delve deep into the situation and to bring out its causes and solutions.
Firstly
,
problem
Suggestion
the problem
 arises due to unemployment.
Under employed
Suggestion
Underemployed
 youth is under immense pressure and start taking narcotics. Media adds fuel to the fire by showing celebrities endorsing tobacco, alcohol and other illegal drugs. The Lenient approach of government is
also
 responsible for increasing
this
problem
.
Moreover
, The materialistic approach and tough competition in all sectors are some of the factors which cause drug addiction. Nothing is impossible. Some steps can be taken to curb
this
problem
. Government and
society
 should work altogether.
Also
, educational institutes should organize seminars to aware youngsters about the side effects of drugs on health. Parents should teach moral values to their pupils and media can
also
 work as
reliable weapon
Suggestion
a reliable weapon
 by telling people about the ill effects of drugs on health. Drug suppliers must be punished more seriously to eradicate
this
problem
.
Finally
, the picture is not as dire as it is painted. Both the government and
society
 should wake up from deep slumber to eradicate
this
 demon completely from the
society

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