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These days many of us prefer to throw damaged things away, whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time. Explain why you think this change has happened. What are the effects of this change in attitude?

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Things are the necessity of life. In recent scenario youngsters usually through the stuff which are bit
damaged but
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damaged, but
 in olden days people
use
 to repair it and re-
use
 it again for decades. The society believes
,
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,
this
changes
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change
 has occurred all because of the modernization and high standard of living. In
this
 essay, I am going to demonstrate the reason why
this
 change has
happned
come to pass
happened
. Undoubtedly, human species are becoming hygiene and feels shame by using old or repaired things.
Firstly
, the value of money has increased as compared to ancient
times though
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times, though
 individual's
think
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thinking
 to purchase new.
Secondly
,
increase
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the increase
an increase
 in the pocket money of children
will makes
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will make
 them lazy, and to
use
 new products is a symbol
to
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for
 standard.
Lastly
, In
recent scenario
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a recent scenario
 we have many options to purchase things rather than making it repair.
For instance
,
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,
 Lad mortals do not want to
use
second
 hand or repaired mobile phones. Certainly, because of
this
 change in the trend, the attitude of humans
also
 changed. It has a bad impact on the upcoming generation. Young ones
has forgotten
Suggestion
have forgotten
 the importance of things. To
recapitate
regain or make up for
recuperate
, the changes in the mentality of persons, not to
use
 damaged things has made material valueless
,
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,
thats
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that's
 the main reason behind the increase of prices of products.
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