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Learning a foreign language offers an insight into how people from other cultures think and see the world. The teaching of foreign language should be compulsory at all primary school. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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 is entry key which opens gates of another
world
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, cultures and different societies in all around the
world
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. As English is defined as
universal
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a universal language
language
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 which is used at majority places of the
world
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 so
its
it is
it's
 very much essential for an individual to learn English to open new opportunities in terms of everything. Regards to that I believe that foreign
language
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 should be included
compulsorily
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compulsory
 in primary schools.
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, any new
language
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 is easy to learn at
young age so
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a young age, so
a young age so
 it would be easily
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adopted
 and so anyone can get the command and grip over a foreign
language
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 easily. I agree for the compulsion on foreign
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 mainly for
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 reasons.
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, It provides
one
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 more skill to be added in
ones
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one's
 persona and can be used at any stage of life to treat it as
advantage
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an advantage
.
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, when a person applies for a job and there are many candidates applied for the same job, but when
employer
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an employer
the employer
want
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wants
a
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an
 employee with skill of foreign
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 as now-a-days its very common to be asked for
knowledge
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 of
foreign
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foreign languages
a foreign language
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. At
this
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 stage the very skill turns out to be very essential and important.
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, the
knowledge
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 of foreign
language
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 opens new opportunities in
business
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 as well.
For example
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, to expand
business
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 not only within the
country but
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country, but
also
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 in other countries as well. The common
language
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 factor gives you
better understanding
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a better understanding
 of other
market’s
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market
business
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 opportunities, it
also
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 provides you change to explain your idea and
business
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 into other market very well so it
can not
can not
cannot
 be misunderstood and fail. These are
one
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 of the key advantages
achived
to gain with effort
achieved
 when
one
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have
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has
knowledge
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 of
foreign
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foreign languages
a foreign language
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, which should be
learn
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learned
 as early as possible in
individul’s
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individual’s
individual
 life so as suggested it should be added as
compulsory subject
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a compulsory subject
 in primary schools.
On the
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contrary there
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contrary, there
 are few aspects which leads in a disagreement to imply forcefully any
language
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 or subject in schools like, it makes very difficult for pupils to learn
two
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languages
 at same
time
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 and slow down the
time
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 of developing command over
one
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language
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 specially the
language
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 which is not used natively and in family surroundings. There are few
surverys
consider in a comprehensive way
surveys
servers
surfers
 are done to show the result when a student learn
native
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a native language
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 only and when a student learn
two
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language
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languages
 at
same
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the same time
time
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 in which
one
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 is native and
one
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 is foreign. These
surveys
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survey
survey's
 results
shows
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show
 that student
learn
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learns
one
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language
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 more
quicky
with rapid movements
quickly
 in
compare
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comparing
 to when learns
two
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language
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languages
 at a
time
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, so it concluded as
disadvantage
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a disadvantage
disadvantages
. In conclusion, I would say that in
compare
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comparing
 to disadvantages of learning new
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 at school there are more advantages and benefits when an individual is having strength of more
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then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
one
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language
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,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 a foreign
language
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.
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 gives
vast scope
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the vast scope
 of reachability to peoples and their cultures and societies to be
learn
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learned
learnt
 and acknowledgement
world
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 about it. Only
language
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 has
power
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the power
 to
though which
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though, which
knowledge
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 sharing is possible. So
learing
the cognitive process of acquiring skill or knowledge
learning
learn
leading
foreign
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a foreign language
language
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 should be made compulsory in schools to get its benefits from the early stage of life.

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