It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important. Do you agree or disagree.

The Climate change has become one of the hottest issues in the world now and
wildlife
is one of the most affected out of it.
Wildlife
is a key component for maintaining the ecological balance of the mother nature.
Infact
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In fact
, the governments are not spending enough money to protect
wildlife
. Everyday
increasing
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is increasing
demand to expand cities to accommodate more people, build bridges, roads etc.
have
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Have
put too much pressure on the forests, which has
further
resulted in creating an imbalance in our ecology.
Hence
the
wildlife
is continuously being reduced everyday. The countries in Africa which have been famous for being able to preserve
wildlife
are facing huge issues from mafias, who are involved in various illegal activities.
Although
there have been some welcome steps taken by the government across the globe
.
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.
For e
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Fore
.g.
in
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In
India there has been a nationwide campaign to save tigers once they were reduced to almost 1500 and, they have
also
been pretty successful in making people aware and protecting the animals. But it's very important to understand that whatever is being done is not enough as we still don't see things improving. I would strongly disagree, with the statement that the governments are spending too much money on projects to protect
wildlife while
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wildlife, while
there are other problems that are more important as
this
directly or indirectly affects each and every person living on
this
planet in some or other ways. Whether we talk about the climate change or the animals entering in the cities to the extinction of various animals. In the end, we are the ones who are responsible for it and we have to make sure that we give the planet in the same condition
to
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for
our future generations as we received from our ancestors.
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  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • safeguard
  • natural habitats
  • foster
  • cultural of conservation
  • long-term ecological sustainability
  • economic benefits
  • significant source of revenue
  • investment
  • nation’s economic wealth
  • preservation of ecosystems
  • clean water and air
  • prioritization
  • multi-faceted government budgets
  • environmental protection
  • wildlife conservation
  • neglecting
  • detrimental effects
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