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some people think money is the best gift to give youngsters, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Suggestion
It
 is often argued by some that the
juvinele
of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people
juvenile
 shall be provided by
money
Use synonyms
 as a gift,
however
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, some are of the opinion that
they
of them or themselves
their
 giving financial aids
is
Suggestion
are
 better for pursuing their career
in
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In
 my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 perceive that it can be beneficial for providing financial assistance.
on
Suggestion
On
 the one hand, the best
efficint
being effective without wasting time or effort or expense
efficient
inefficient
 gift that can be provided is
money
Use synonyms
 because teenagers can stand up on their own with greater responsibility.
Linking Words
in
Suggestion
In
 other words, they can lay the foundation for
further
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 studies by utilising the
money
Use synonyms
 provided
such
Linking Words
 as buying a laptop or funding for
a
Suggestion
an
 education course.
on
Suggestion
On
 the flip side, having
money
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 with teenagers can be prone to unethical things in society
such
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 as gambling,
alchohaling
Suggestion
 and wasting. Since
this
Linking Words
 is the
begining
the event consisting of the start of something
beginning
 of their career, there are not having enough experience and having
money
Use synonyms
 means that they use it for anything.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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