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some people find that following a strict routine allows them to feel more in control. Others however think that constant changes to the routine make life more interesting and less predictable discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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An increasing number of people believe that following a carefully made
schedual
plan for an activity or event
schedule
 might help them to have a control over their life. Whereas their opponents state that making spontaneous decisions have much more
benefits
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benefit
 in general. From my point of view, it is vital to have some set of
rules but
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rules, but
 there must be a time for sudden occasions
,
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,
too.
First
 of all, it must be said that the most important benefit of having strict routine is a sense of stability. It means that people
,
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,
while knowing what to expect
next
, will have more confidence in their future and less
concerns
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concern
 over trivial matters.
For example
,
immense quantity
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an immense quantity
immense quantities
the immense quantity
 of well-known businessmen
have
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has
 their timetable made in advance. They tend to say that managing time correctly is a key role to
success
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the success
 and overall productivity.
On the other hand
, a feeling of being obliged to do something may cause a mental disorders. And it
also
 might lead to feeling stuck in that one's mind can become
resricted
subject to restriction or subjected to restriction
restricted
 by rules. Because of
this
, there is a possibility of a sudden drop of productivity.
However
, if there
is
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are
 no rules at all a person can become too loose and idle.
That is
 why in my
opinion there
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opinion, there
 must be a balance between planning and following the flow. Considering all statements written above, it can be said that maintaining a balance is essential.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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