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The government should allocate more funding to teaching sciences rather than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree?

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In today's world, there are many existing
school
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schools
-subjects which are essential for countries' advancement. It has been argued by some
people whether
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people, whether
 governments' ought to allot more money to implement teaching sciences into schools' curriculum. The main reason to support my opinion is that scientific professions
such
 as doctors, physicists, biologists, they all contribute to countries' progression via various devices of technology, which are created by them.
Thus
, if a country's government spends more resources to educate people with more essential subjects,
then
 it might lead them to scientific discoveries due to the contribution which had been done by the government by giving what people deserve.
For example
, some countries are more progressed than others because their main concerns are concentrated on their improvement, and they pay less attention to others' politics. Another point to consider is that if the majority of the countries spent their resources into educating people,
then
 they would elevate the quality of life by creating devices which could allow people to do thorough scrutiny and detect any malignant diseases in their early stages.
Therefore
, it would prolong people's life span and
additionally
, those scientists would develop different ways to harvest more crop, which would help many people, not only in their country but worldwide.
For instance
, one
such
 scientific discovery can lead to the eradication of famine around the world,
although
 in some cases
this
 is caused artificially due to some unknown reasons. In conclusion, I firmly believe that in the case of
governments'
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government
 funding
to
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for
 teaching sciences, can advance those countries technologically, which could elevate the quality of life.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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