Some people argue that arts, such as paintings and music, are a waste of money and the government should spent this money on other public services. To what extent do u agree or disagree with this statement.

It is clear that interests are changing
overtime
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over time
. There are many people who think arts
such
as music and paintings are
waste
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a waste
of money and government can spend
this
money on other public services. In my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
completely disagree with
this
statement and in
this
essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will support my view with
example
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examples
an example
.
To begin
with,
arts
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the arts
are very important for refreshing minds. Most of the people
gets
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get
relaxed through
this
kind of various arts.
For example
, a survey conducted among school students as well as senior citizens reported that they will hear music all the time for a
refreshment
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refresh
and it will
also
help to maintain their health.
Moreover
, there are many talented artists in our country.
Also
,
government
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the government
encourage
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encourages
their talents by conducting exhibition frequently.
This
will help to improve their skills. Whereas, it will improve the logical skills in people through understanding the inner meaning in various paintings.
As a result
,
art
should definitely helps
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should definitely help
minds to improve.
However
, there are minor drawbacks in it.
For instance
, school students give
alot
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a lot
of importance to
art
apart from their studies.
This
will affect their academic career.
Also
. Music needs a good practice.
Thus
, it is a time consuming one. But we can solve
this
problem through managing the time in a proper way. In conclusion, while
individual
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an individual
the individual
has many benefits
from
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of
arts, but we can
also
give some money to public works without destroying the
art
the 3rd planet from the sun; the planet we live on
earth
. Personally,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will definitely support for the
art
that improves the mind.
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