Some parents think children should have mobile phones, others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

It is often argued by parents that their kids should have
mobile
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a mobile phone
phone
while some do not agree with
this
view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
. In my opinion
this
device has
became
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become
any integral part of human life as it is the most efficient way of communication
besides
children’s can
use
it for studying if used only for
right purpose
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the right purpose
. Nowadays, Many parents are purchasing the mobile device for their
kids especially
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kids, especially
for teenagers as they are travelling to schools which are far away from home or staying in hostel. Due to the
phone
parents or children’s can easily communicate with each other on button click.
Also
however
, due the modern
technology mobile
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technology, mobile
phones can
also
them in studying.
This
handset can perform all the activities of computer like, surfing the internet, watching educational videos,
also
it is possible to create power point presentation through phones. But teenagers do not
use
the phones for studying
instead
they
use
it for playing games. The mobile phones
are mostly
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are mostly used
mostly use
are mostly using
use
for running social media application like Facebook, Instagram. Even the 4 to 5 years old kids nowadays, want mobile phones.
This
can be most harmful to them as continuous
use
of
phone
can damage the eyes or it can be
use
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used
to play violent and dangerous
games
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games, for
for
example blue
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example, blue
whale,
this
game in 2014 motivated the teenagers to commit suicide as
task
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a task
. In conclusion,
Use
of the mobile
phone
have
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has
its own benefit as well as hazardous effect. As stated
use
of
this
device has more benefits like communication, but
also
has many disadvantages. Parents should guide their youngster's to take the benefit of
this
technology along with providing
then
objective case of they
them
safety instructions.
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