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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate, how to work
wave -
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wave-energy
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energy
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machine
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machines
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 and
suitable
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the suitable
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 location of
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machine
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the machine
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.
Overall
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,
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machine
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the machine
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 is worked
by
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with
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 the help of
waves
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 on the seashore.
Design
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The design
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 of
this
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machine
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 has two chambers that are one
chamber
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 is related to the
waves
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 from
sea
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the sea
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, and another
chamber
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id
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is
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 combined with turbines and
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a generator
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generator
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generators
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. With regards to the
waves
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 and
water
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 levels
air
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 flow pass through the canal to the
second
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chamber
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 and by that, turbines rotate
voluntary
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voluntarily
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.
Similarly
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,
air
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 flows from outside
pass
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passes
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 inside the
chamber
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, and other turbines rotate
also
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. Meanwhile,
generator
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the generator
a generator
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 would produce electricity as depends on the power of
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the air
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air flow
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airflow
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.
While
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,
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apply
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 turbine rotation extra
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air flow
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airflow
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 will pass outside and to the
water
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 as well. Over
to
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apply
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the location of
wave
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the wave
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energy
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machine
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, diagrams demonstrate that there are two locations
such
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 as
,
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apply
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 one in deep-sea
water
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 and
other
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the other
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 in
mid sea
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mid-sea
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water
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.
In deep-sea
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Deep-sea
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water
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 has been too much expensive but,
which
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apply
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may produce high power of
energy
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by
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with
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 the help of larger
waves
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.
On the other hand
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,
mid sea
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mid-sea
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water
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 might produce less
energy
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 as compared to
the
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apply
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deep-sea
water
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, because
which
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it
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 may get only smaller
waves
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.
Nevertheless
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,
cost
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the cost
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 of installation is low
in contrast
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 to the large wave
energy
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machine
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, machine, waves, chamber, water, air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 8 times.
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