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Some people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries, shop and on public transport, others argue that people should be free to use their mobiles wherever they like. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, mobile phones have become an essential part of life and one cannot imagine living without phones. A certain segment of the society opine that they should be restricted in public places
such
 as libraries, shops and on buses or trains. While others believe that anyone can
use
 cell
phone
 wherever they want.
This
 notion will discuss both sides of the arguments in details and provide evidence whether mobile phones should be banned or free to
use
.
Firstly
, using mobile
phone
 in public places like libraries will distract other people. And, the distraction could completely spoil the reading environment.
For instance
, a library where people reading books of interest can be easily distracted through the ringtones.
Secondly
, when people
use
 mobile phones while travelling in a train or a bus, they are creating a disturbance for fellow passenger who may be reading or sleeping. To exemplify, passenger
On the other hand
, the more people
use
 their mobile phones, the more they will be connected with their families and friends. Due to restrictions in some places they might not find time to catch up with their dear ones.
Additionally
, mobile phones nowadays come up with a camera and music.
This
 would keep them away from capturing the pictures of the events or taking the selfies in public transport.
Also
, people love to listen to music while travelling. Cell phones can be easily be kept on vibrate mode,
this
 will not distract people due to
loud
weight to be borne or conveyed
load
 ringtones of incoming calls. To conclude, using of mobile phones has both advantages and disadvantages.
Therefore
, in my opinion, wherever we
use
 a mobile
phone
, we should make sure that the other person is not getting disturbed because of our cell
phone
 usage. In my opinion, they should not be banned.

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