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Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice?

#students #work #university #study #support #choice
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In recent decades,
university
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education
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 has played critical role
on
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in
upbringing people
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upbringing, people
 with knowledge in order to provide expert labours for market in different areas.
Although
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 some people believe
work
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 experience before tertiary
education
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 will be more useful for students in some cases, I think it is better to
been
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be
being
 educated in
university
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 before beginning the
work
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. There is a probability to give up the
university
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education
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 after entering to
work
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 environment. Working can change peoples’ lifestyles and make them reluctant to return in
academic atmosphere
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an academic atmosphere
.
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, Iran’s statistics
center
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Center
centre
 has reported that 30% of people who have not gone to
university
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 have declared that working has removed their passion for
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university
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the university
. Without
university
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education
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 some people may involve in jobs which do not suit their talents, while if they had studied in universities, they would have been promoted and qualified for more appropriate jobs. Results from the special investigation in Harvard
University
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 from 2010 till 2017, on people who have high level jobs,
has been showed
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showed
have shown
 that 90% of them directly entered universities after getting their high
school’s
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school
 diplomas. In conclusion,
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 in some
cases people
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cases, people
 can be successful with having
work
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 experience between their different
education
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 grades, studying in
university
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 before
work
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 experience has more benefits
such
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 as feeling less stranger with
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university environment
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the university environment
 and getting better job positions according to
talents
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the talents
.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preparation
  • mature
  • responsibility
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • organizational skills
  • career exploration
  • financial independence
  • work ethic
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