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Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice?

#students #work #university #study #support #choice
In recent decades,
university
education
 has played critical role
on
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in
upbringing people
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upbringing, people
 with knowledge in order to provide expert labours for market in different areas.
Although
 some people believe
work
 experience before tertiary
education
 will be more useful for students in some cases, I think it is better to
been
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be
being
 educated in
university
 before beginning the
work
. There is a probability to give up the
university
education
 after entering to
work
 environment. Working can change peoples’ lifestyles and make them reluctant to return in
academic atmosphere
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an academic atmosphere
.
For example
, Iran’s statistics
center
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Center
centre
 has reported that 30% of people who have not gone to
university
 have declared that working has removed their passion for
university
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the university
. Without
university
education
 some people may involve in jobs which do not suit their talents, while if they had studied in universities, they would have been promoted and qualified for more appropriate jobs. Results from the special investigation in Harvard
University
 from 2010 till 2017, on people who have high level jobs,
has been showed
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showed
have shown
 that 90% of them directly entered universities after getting their high
school’s
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school
 diplomas. In conclusion,
although
 in some
cases people
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cases, people
 can be successful with having
work
 experience between their different
education
 grades, studying in
university
 before
work
 experience has more benefits
such
 as feeling less stranger with
university environment
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the university environment
 and getting better job positions according to
talents
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the talents
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preparation
  • mature
  • responsibility
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • organizational skills
  • career exploration
  • financial independence
  • work ethic
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