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Nowadays we see an increase in social problems involving teenagers. Many people believe that it is because parents spend more time at work and less with their children. Do you agree or disagree?

#teenagers #people #parents #time #work #children
This
days
Suggestion
day
 parents work more and that they spend less
time
 with their children
,
Accept space
,
this
 is what some people are saying. I
totaly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
totally
 agree with the statement and I will explain my opinion.
First
 of all, we live in a world that money gives you power, and people are working harder and harder to try to reach the power thinking that when they will have a
heathy
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
heavy
financiar
involving financial matters
financial
 life they will find the
time
 to enjoy their family and friends.
Furthermore parents
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Furthermore, parents
this
plural of "this"
these
 days try to work more so they can afford to buy their children posh
gagets
a device or control that is very useful for a particular job
gadgets
 and they think that
this
 is the way to show their love.
Finally nowdays
Accept comma addition
Finally, now days
Finally now days
 people are trying to get a better
financiar
involving financial matters
financial
 position and they forget the most important thing,
time
flys
(theater) the space over the stage (out of view of the audience) used to store scenery (drop curtains)
flies
 and the
time
 that they are
missed
Suggestion
missing
 from their children will never come back.

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