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* There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family.

#trend #world
Recently, it has been found out that people no longer desire to rear big sized family but minute sized.
Although
 the merits include the fact that it is economical and the children get optimal
attention but
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attention, but
 there are some drawbacks that should not be overlooked. To start with, one major advantage of
this
 kind of family is that it is pocket friendly.
That is
 to say, it is
cheap
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cheaper
 to maintain. Since
the the
definite article
the
 numbers are usually around 3-4,
that is
 the parents with 1 or 2 children, the parents might not have to live from hand to mouth. Sometimes, little income will suffice and everyone will be satisfied. Another advantage is that, the children get the best legacy.
In other words
, they are properly nurtured through their educational life. Some meticulous ones could
further
to acquire
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acquire
 several post graduate degrees.
On the other hand
, there are some downsides.
Firstly
, the offspring from
such
 homes might not be socially inclined. To clarify,
them
people in general
they
 might have low thresholds for dispute and be unable to handle other people's differences.
Consequently
, they keep to themselves and could swing into depression if proper care is not taken.
Secondly
, they have been found to be sometimes overtly protected.
As a result
, they do not have a mind of their own, not only
that but
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that, but
 might be naive in most cases. Eventually, they might grow into adults with low self esteem and in worse circumstances commit suicide. As it was the case of an only child who dropped a suicidal note stating how she could not cope with bullying at school. In conclusion, despite the upsides of small sized family, the minuses which include being socially disadvantaged and undue
protection
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protected
 that results in inadequacies in adulthood should be of great concern.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial stability
  • Living standards
  • Concentrated resources
  • Parent-child bonding
  • Upbringing
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Supportive network
  • Cooperation
  • Multigenerational
  • Cultural traditions
  • Agricultural communities
  • Loneliness
  • Social competencies
  • Financial strain
  • Resource dilution
  • Education opportunities
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