ome people believe that children should begin formal learning at school as young as possible. However, others feel that children should not begin school until they are at least seven years old. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

There has always been a long-running debate over whether children should enrol in
school
as young as possible or whether they should spend their time at home and enjoy their freedom until they are a little older. My view is that children should not begin formal learning at
school
until they are at least seven years old. There are some notable benefits of getting
formal education
Suggestion
a formal education
earlier in life.
For example
, kids can adopt the concepts of “sharing is caring” and how to follow instructions in a classroom environment earlier than those who stay at home until much later.
Additionally
, parents these days are more concerned about the future of their children when facing the world at large. Parents tend to believe that enrolling their kids early in
school
will give their children a head start at absorbing knowledge.
However
, allowing children to stay at home and do anything freely without being forced to get up super early in the morning has more advantages.
First
of all, children get to spend more time with their parents, which allows them to build a stronger bond with each other and improve their family relationships.
Secondly
, recent research in the UK shows that starting
school
later is better for children’s brains and personal development. In countries
such
as Sweden and Finland, kids have better academic achievement and child well-being, despite children not starting
school
until seven. In conclusion,
although
enrolling children who are under the age of seven in
school
has some benefits, I believe that freedom should be given to young children to spend more time with their parents and ensure a better future.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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