ome people believe that children should begin formal learning at school as young as possible. However, others feel that children should not begin school until they are at least seven years old. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

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There has always been a long-running debate over whether children should enrol in

school

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as young as possible or whether they should spend their time at home and enjoy their freedom until they are a little older. My view is that children should not begin formal learning at

school

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until they are at least seven years old. There are some notable benefits of getting

formal education

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a formal education

earlier in life.

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, kids can adopt the concepts of “sharing is caring” and how to follow instructions in a classroom environment earlier than those who stay at home until much later.

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, parents these days are more concerned about the future of their children when facing the world at large. Parents tend to believe that enrolling their kids early in

school

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will give their children a head start at absorbing knowledge.

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, allowing children to stay at home and do anything freely without being forced to get up super early in the morning has more advantages.

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of all, children get to spend more time with their parents, which allows them to build a stronger bond with each other and improve their family relationships.

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, recent research in the UK shows that starting

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later is better for children’s brains and personal development. In countries

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as Sweden and Finland, kids have better academic achievement and child well-being, despite children not starting

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until seven. In conclusion,

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enrolling children who are under the age of seven in

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has some benefits, I believe that freedom should be given to young children to spend more time with their parents and ensure a better future.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

272 words

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ome people believe that children should begin formal learning at school as young as possible. However, others feel that children should not begin school until they are at least seven years old. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Parents should punish their children when they do something wrong, do you agree or not ?

An increasing number of profectional such as teachers and doctors are leaving their own poooer countries to work in developing countries. What are the reasons for this trend?

some people think that manufactures and shopping malls should sell fewer packaged products while other argue that people have the responbility to buy products with less packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.