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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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With the development of the globalization, more and more people are able to travel around the world. Some argue that international
tourism
 can create tension with the local people, but not create mutual understanding. I agree with that international
tourism
 can influence local people’s life seriously.
Firstly
, international
tourism
 has become cheaper and more prevalent than in the past. People can travel anywhere if they are economically well-off enough to afford. They may not be willing to spend time on studying the customs of their destination,
however
.
Compareds
Suggestion
Compared
Compares
 to
On the contrary
, in the past, people may treasure the trip they have as international trip was extremely expensive in the past. In order to have a better understanding of local culture and improve the travel quality, they may do some research about their
destinationdestiny’s
 culture in detail. The
tenstion
(psychology) a state of mental or emotional strain or suspense
tension
transition
 may be created when the
tourism
invade
Suggestion
invades
 local custom.
Secondly
, international
tourism
 may compete with local
resourcesresouces
. It is well-known that local people have to spend their scarce scared resources to serve vice the international
touristsm
someone who travels for pleasure
tourists
.
Such
 as the
tourism
 from Mainland China. They purchased a large number of milk powder in Hong Kong.
As a result
, many local pregnant women and infants do not have adequate milk to drink.
Therefore
, many local people may hold negative thoughts about
tourism
.
Thirdly
, international
tourism
 may threaten the local environment. Because of the ill-bred, many international
tourism
 may throw away their waste randomly. It is no doubt that the
illed
(used especially of persons) having lived for a relatively long time or attained a specific age
old
 manner of
tourism
 will threaten the local environment.
As a result
, the relationship between
tourism
 and local people will get worse. As all factors are taken into consideration, international
tourism
 may create tension by their rude
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
Also
, they may compete with local resources and even threaten the local environment.

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