Some people think that illegal Internet downloads are having a negative effect on the music industry. Others feel that they have little or no impact on artists. Discuss both sides, and give your own opinion.

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Many people believe that

music

downloads via illegal websites negatively impacted the

music

industry. While others believe the negative impact is no that much that affects the artist. One the one hand, people believe that downloading

music

from illegal sources does not affect the artist. They can make money from many other sources like concerts, private

music

shows, and endorsements.

For example

, many Indian

music

directors are working in the movie and judging many

musical

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music

and dance competitions on the various private

channel

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channels

and get a handsome amount of money.

However

, I believe that judging the shows is not their prime profession; these are the back up.

Therefore I

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Therefore, I

think that illegal downloading creates a negative impact on them.

On the other hand

, I believe that

this

will affect the whole

music

sector, not one person. Because in the composition of

music

, there are many departments involved

besides

the composer.

For example

a singer, musicians,

recordist

promotors

a message issued in behalf of some product or cause or idea or person or institution

promotions

printers

and many more.

Therefore

, I think

this

act will not only impact one

person but

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person, but

many people, along with their families;

as a result

, it's hard for them to survive in the

music

market for a long time. To summarize,

although

many people who are related to the

music

industry do have multiple sources of income, still I believe that downloading illegal

music

from the internet without paying will negatively affect the whole

music

industry.

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Topic Vocabulary:

illegal downloads
financial losses
record labels
decrease in sales
perception
undermine
upcoming artists
pirated
exposure
concert attendance
merchandise sales
alternative revenue streams
live performances
sponsorships
streaming platforms
business models
loyal fan base
adapt
mitigate
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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