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In many countries, women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, in most nations,
both
 men and women are now
both
 doing full
time
work
 and
as a result
 of
this
 it is believed that household chores should
therefore
 be shared among them. In my opinion, I completed disagree with
this
 notion as there are other factors that dictates how housework should be shared.
To begin
 with, different people have different ability.
In other words
, everybody have things that they are good or better at doing them other people and they are more likely to be productive at it than other things.
For example
, am a better cleaner than my wife and anything I tell her to tidy up a place, she usually does a terrible job at it and
as a result
 of
this
 I always do the cleaning even if
that is
 the one house chore to do. If I insist on her doing the cleaning despite knowing that she doesn't know how to do it, just because of sharing
work
 will not be reasonable.
Additionally
,
although
both
 parties are working full
time
, some jobs are more demanding than other and
this
 another factor that should guide how
this
 home
work
 should be divided.
For instance
, my wife and I
both
work
 an average of 8 hours a day, as a surgeon I operate in seven of those hours, while my wife as a receptionist in a law firm working for the same amount of
time
 sitting down and receiving phone calls. It will not fair to me to do the same amount of house chores as her because I am usually exhausted by the
time
 I get home compared to her. To conclude,
although
 most couples are now
both
 working the same amount of
time
, it might look reasonable to expect them to share the household task equally, but elements
such
 as who is more efficient at certain things and
also
 fatigue based on their
work
 demands should be considered as well.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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