Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age.

In every
job
, either in a private or a public
sector
, there is an
age
limit
. After that
age
, you are no longer required to perform your duties. Some jobs provide pension too after
retirement
. There are various
age
groups in every organization and everyone wants to go higher. Without maximum
age
limit
, it would be difficult to grow. Because of the
job
, people get many benefits and a money. So, they run their families and life smoothly. It is evident that, the amount of pension and benefits after
retirement
, are very less compare to the normal
job
. There are exceptional cases where people are unable to perform their duties due illness those should be retired early. So, it's agreed that
age
limit
must be define for everyone in any
job
and yes, there must be provision of
retirement
for them who are performing their duties honestly, but due to some issues they need
retirement
.
First
, the organizational structure of any
job
sector
is like a pyramid. People move from bottom to top just like they are using a ladder. If there will be an
age
limit
,
then
only they can reach to top. There is a lot of competition nowadays. Every
sector
wants to thrive, they need new innovations and talented newcomer. So, without
age
limit
it would be difficult to give chance to new talent.
Hence
, It's clear that a set
retirement
age
is must for everyone and it's must have thing for every
sector
of the
job
.
Secondly
, In private sectors, there are some cases, where a person is performing their duties well and
that is
a star performer of the company. But, due to some unforeseen circumstances like
illeness
impairment of normal physiological function affecting part or all of an organism
illness
or family issues. In these cases
instead
of giving early
retirement
, they relieved from their duties without any
penson
a regular payment to a person that is intended to allow them to subsist without working
pension
pens on
pensions
or benefits. In these cases, normally person wants
early retirment
Suggestion
an early retirement
early retirement
. We have seen
such
cases in
public
Suggestion
the public sector
sector
also
.
Therefore
, there should be provision of early
retirement
in all the
job
sector
. In summary, It is completely justified that, there should be
a
Suggestion
an
age
limit
in all the
job
sectors, irrespective of profession. And
also
, there must be
clause
Suggestion
a clause
of early
retirement
for those who have some special case.
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