Many young people today know more about international pop and movie stars than about famous people in the history of their country. What is the reason for this? What can be done to increase young people's interest in famous people in the history of their country?

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A young generation of
this
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modern era is more attracted to the
movie
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actors and singers
instead
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of knowing their national hero.The reason behind is probably media who are more interested in presenting the history of
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celebrities rather than
heroes
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the heroes
of history who made their contribution to build their nations.
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, I believe the media should help by making movies and documentaries related to them. These
days the
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days, the
most popular mode of communication in the media is either print media or television. Most of the time, the
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played by them is commercially entertaining movies or music videos and concerts. People are more watching movies and listening to the
songs most
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songs, most
of their time;
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, they are more inclined towards it, so their interest to know about their nation is declining day by day. To mitigate
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problem and make young people know about their heroes in the media again. The media personnel and authorities should take some steps to decrease the entertainment-related
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and initiate making feature films or documentaries about history and narrate the story of the national heroes and their contributions.
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, no one knew about the Indian national hero Mangal
Pandey who
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Pandey, who
was a junior soldier who sacrifices his life to make their nation free from the invaders until the
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released in 2006. In conclusion, I believe that the media is responsible for
movie
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stars and international singers' popularity among the youth of these days, and to curb that problem, again, the media has to take some action by decreasing the entertaining
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and increasing the educational
content
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.
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