A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In my opinion and regarding on what my family has taught me, I consider one person's worth is
definetely
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
on their values, why for? Basically because I think nowadays is kind of difficult to find people who really want to show themselves to the world just like they really are, with no fear of some others judging them, even though that's why so many people try to incur in all these fake situations in which they prefer to being seen and recognized as something
in particular
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, or with different type of material possessions, social status, social power, among others; and they don't see that what it really matters is all your values, your education you received either at home by your family or at school by your teachers, because at the end of the day all material possessions, social status, important job roles, etc can eventually disappear from one day to another and what it will always remain with you is all your values as a person.
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Finally we
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Finally, we
should not
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
track of our
values althought
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values, although
values although
we
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have noticed
nowadays not so many people try to demonstrate them lets just make the difference.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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