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Topic- In recent years, young people in many countries choose to live by themselves. What are the reasons and is it positive or negative for the development of the society.

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Recently, it
is being observed
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has been observed
 that youngsters across the world, especially in foreign countries want to live by themselves. In my opinion, it is absolutely right to do so as it would benefit the individual as well as the
society
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 as a whole.
Firstly
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, living independently without parents’ support would make an individual to be financially responsible. In todays world, it is crucial for a person to be financially stable due to the rising inflation and other economic changes.
Also
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, the
society
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 in general accepts and respects people who are not dependent on their families.
Their
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There
 is a great impact
of
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on
 people who choose to live by themselves
on
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in
 the
society
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 in a
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 way. The youth these days wants to be independent in all ways. Being financially independent from an early age would mean more people contributing towards the economic growth of the nation. Countries that promote
such
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 decisions of the youth would definitely have an edge over other nations. The rate of growth and development would be higher as compared to other countries.
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, moving out of parents’ house and living by own would make the young people to be more responsible. People at a very young age would learn to manage the
responsibilites
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibilities
 associated with their house. They would learn to perform the basic household chores, which according to me, every individual must know.
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, it is in the best interest of the
society
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 as well as the youth to take the decision of living by themselves.
This
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 would contribute
in
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to
 the overall development of an individual and
also
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 the in the development of the
society
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.
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