Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that, developed nations
support
underdeveloped countries by providing
money but
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money, but
it doesn't resolve the poverty problem.
Instead
, developed countries should try to provide different type of aids other than providing money.
This
essay disagrees that,
first
world countries should provide any other
support
to the poor nations as they will not become independent and will always seek
support
and
moreover
, rich country will always interfere in policies matter.
Firstly
, rich nations always try to provide health care, education, infrastructure to underdeveloped
nation
, but if developed countries always provide
such
support
poor nations will always seek for the help. They will not try to build their own infrastructure.
Moreover
,
this
will
also
lead to rise in corruption.
However
, rich countries should
providing
Suggestion
provide
medical care, educational help, and jobs to poor country at the initial
stage but
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stage, but
not always, because
this
make
Suggestion
makes
them
dependant
Suggestion
dependent
and they will not try to self-develop.
Secondly
, due to political war going between nations, the developed
nation
will try to impose its own rules on poor
nation
.
This
law's may not be beneficial to the poor
nation
.
In addition
, to
this
during
warfare poor
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warfare, poor
nation
might have to unwilling
support
it's
aider
after a negative statement used as an intensive meaning something like 'likewise' or 'also'
either
in return for the favour. In conclusion, developed
nation
should try to aid the underdeveloped
nation
to grow, but it should be done through financial aid only. In my opinion, I believe that poor countries should try to avoid getting benefits from
rich
Suggestion
a rich nation
nation
instead
, they should try to independent and stand on
they
of them or themselves
their
them
on
belonging to or on behalf of a specified person (especially yourself); preceded by a possessive
own
feet rather than relying in other
nation
for help.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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