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There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family

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One of the most noticeable drift in the world today is the huge rise in small family size. Having a small family is beneficial owning to the lower financial cost and quality achievements, but there are some hindrances to be considered. One of the major benefits of having a small family is the low financial cost.
This
 is because the cost maintenance of a small family household items and needs like clothing, shopping
etc
 is lower when compared to a large family.
In addition
, the parents would be able to achieve more in terms of offering quality education to the children.
Furthermore
, the parents would be able to combine their careers with family life.
Also
, the parents would have more attention for the children and there would be peace within the family.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
one of the major pitfalls of having a small family is the
overdependence
 of the children on their parents and outsiders.
This
 is because the children are always too pampered and
thus
 mostly do not have any initiative of their own outside their
parents
Suggestion
parents'
 influence.
In addition
, most of the children from small families are very lazy.
This
 is usually because their parents cater for them all through and does everything in the house for them.
Also
, children from a small family
mostly lacks
Suggestion
mostly lack
 the required confidence to relate with their peers because they have not been exposed to socialization. In conclusion, while having a small family is beneficial in so many ways, the pitfalls
such
 as
overdependence
 of the children and laziness should not be overlooked.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial stability
  • Living standards
  • Concentrated resources
  • Parent-child bonding
  • Upbringing
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Supportive network
  • Cooperation
  • Multigenerational
  • Cultural traditions
  • Agricultural communities
  • Loneliness
  • Social competencies
  • Financial strain
  • Resource dilution
  • Education opportunities
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