It is good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on it .discuss the advantages and disadvantages .explan your choice.

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Using computers in early
age
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is becoming more popular in
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present era due to the demanding of t
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the technological world
a technological world
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, using
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omputer
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a computer
the computer
computers
is good for children in their d
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developmental
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by
giving long hours for it.
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phenomenon and
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highlight my own point of view. One of predominant advantages of using
computer
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in early
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nteresting way
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an interesting way
of
study
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because children can easily understand any topic by the audio visual therapy.
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,
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hey are having long term memory, so it will be helpful for their proper brain development.
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,
ids
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learn about the different ways of preparing assignments by using different software on it as a
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an
example of Microsoft's office.
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, online education is
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very popular by the dint of their facilities of those kind of students who are willing f
or
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tudy but
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study, but
having p
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a physical disability
it leads to children nowadays gaining e
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an education
from
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advance
study
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method. Despite the above a
dvantages there
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advantages, there
are some negative aspects of using
computer
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in early
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for long h
ours resulting
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hours, resulting
many health related issues
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as eye problems, obesity and health problems is a b
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big
bigger
concern.
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hey do not perform physical activities in proper ways.
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it makes isolated personality of the young children as they have a lack of interpersonal capabilities of indulging w
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onsequently they
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have aggressive b
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manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
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, waste of time is
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big
drawback of utilizing
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omputer
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the computer
in
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the study
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hildren not only lost their traditional method of writing but
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have b
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broken
their thinking power. In conclusion,
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there are a lot of benefits of using
computer
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for children in learning s
tage but
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stage, but
I believe that its negative consequences cannot be overlooked as it has many physical and social problems
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o I think that it should be u
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used
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