In order for many young people to contribute to our society, it is worthwhile to make university/college students do colunteer work in order to give credits which are necessary for their degrees. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Modern education has become one of the tools for the betterment of the society. While we recognise the importance of the academic curricula, the benefits of awarding points for voluntary positive work ethic cannot be emphasized enough.
For example
, students who volunteer with organisations that work to help the elderly and protect our environment should be encouraged. The focus of
this
essay is to convey my complete agreement on why it is important that students be rewarded for their extra curricular activities especially in situations where it promotes societal welfare.
Alot
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A lot
of our grading system is based on points. Studies have shown that our bodies involuntarily release
endorphines
when we feel rewarded for a
particluar
unique or specific to a person or thing or category
particular
action and good grades contribute to a large chunk of
this
feeling.
Although
the current grading point system focuses on specific factors to award scores, one would easily agree that a good way to encourage positive societal contribution would be to include these in the point system.
this
Suggestion
This
can be done by listing out specific general work factors which can be
application
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applied
notwithstanding of the range of
volunteer
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voluntary
bodies.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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