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in many countries men and women are working full time it is therefore logical for both men and women to share their house hold tasks. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In many parts of the world, parents or couples have their own full time jobs, which leave limited hours to take care their household needs. Some suggest an equal division of responsibilities. In my opinion, I do agree with equal share of tasks between man and woman living under one roof. On the one hand, I strongly agree with the voices that call for equal participation between the couple for their home maintenance and enough care. Knowing that, they work for at least eight hours and return back home tired, so, it is going to be helpful to cooperate with each other in cleaning and cooking
for instance
.
In addition
,
this
 will decrease chances for dispute between them, and that will ensure calm lovely domestic feelings. Added to that, if the couple has children
this
 would be great, since, their kids will have better care and attention.
On the other hand
, some disagree with
this
 suggestion, claiming that men's jobs are more difficult and harder than women's jobs. So they need a moment to relax when they came back home.
Such
 as, Surgeons work-style is very hectic and takes long working hours. In fact, they might work up to midnight and that make it impossible for them to share and help in the emerging daily house problems and needs. In conclusion, life needs strong bipartisan collaboration between both man and woman in the same house in order to convert their life into calm and peaceful environment which in turns will be good for the whole family.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • - Household tasks
  • - Full-time work
  • - Logical
  • - Share
  • - Men and women
  • - Equality
  • - Gender roles
  • - Burden
  • - Teamwork
  • - Cooperation
  • - Counterargument
  • - Refutation
  • - Cultural expectations
  • - Time constraints
  • - Work-life balance
  • - Personal preferences
  • - Abilities
  • - Importance
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