Over the past fifty years, international sports events such as Olympic games and world cup competition have played an increasing important role in our society. However, many people think such events are an enormous waste of money, time and effort. Do you agree?

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TO BE HEALTHY, SOME PHYSICAL ACTIVITY IS NEEDED AND THE BEST WAY TO MAINTAIN FITNESS IS THE PLAYING SPORT. SINCE HALF OF A CENTURY, WORLD CUP AND OLYMPIC GAMES ARE BECOMING MORE POPULAR DAY BY DAY. NIETHHELESS, SOME FOLKS ARGUE THAT
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KIND OF COMPETITIONS REQUIRE A GREAT AMOUNT OF BUCKS AND TIME TO MAKE THE EVENT SUCCESSFUL.
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ESSAY WILL DISCUSS ABOUT WHY IT UNUSEFUL TO SPEND THE CURRENCY AND TIME FOR
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EVENT AND
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, WHERE
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BUCKS SHOULD BE SPENT ON
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AS HEALTH CARE, ARMY AND SO ON. TO START WITH,
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TYPE OF COMPETITIONS ARE TEND TO CREAT A ENVIROMWNTAL PROBLEMS
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AS DUE TO TRASH THROWEN BY AUDIENCE. AS A CONSEQUENCE, GARABAGES INCREASE AND THERE WILL BE NO PLACE FOR IT TO DISTROY WHICH IS NOT AFFORDABLE APART FORM EVENT EXPENSES.
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, IT WOULD AFFECT THE NATION'S ECONOMY.
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, TRASH DATA OF THE USA REVEALED THAT 70% OF THE WATSE ARE COMING FROM THE SPORT GROUND WHERE THE HUGE EVENTS OCCOURED.
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CAN BE THE ONE OF THE REASON WHY PEOPLE THINK SO. ON THE SOLUTION SIDE, I BELIEVE, THE MONEY SHOULD BE SPENT TO MAKE A BETTER HEALTH CARE SYSTEM.
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DECREASE THE BURDEN ON THE INDIVIDUALS WHO ARE IN NEED AND GOVERNMENT AS WELL.
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, THE FUTURE ECONOMY WOULD BOOST AND PEOPLE CAN OBTAIN ENORMOUS BENEFITS AS GOVERNMENT WOULD HAVE ENLUGH MONEY TO MEET THE CIVILIAN'S DEMAND.
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, CANADA'S SPORT DEPARTMENT SECTOR FOUND THAT 40% OF THE MONEY FROM
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HUGE EVENTS COULD BE BENEFIACIAL TO MAKE EXCELLENT HEALTH CARE FACILITIES.
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. A FOREIGN LEVEL COMPETITION INDEED PROVIED A ENTERTAINMENT TO THE PUBLIC, ACCORDING TO ME, IT SHOULD HAVE SOME LIMITATIONS ON BUDGET SO THAT IT CAN BE INVESTED FOR THE INDEED FOLKS. IN CONCLUSION, INTERNATIONS EVENTS CREATS A BOTH POSITIVE AND NEGATIVE IMPACT,
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IT IS INDIVIDUAL AND GOVERNMENT'S RESPONSIBILITY TO DECIDE THE WISE DECISION AND PROCEED WITH THE ACTIONS,
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SURELY FOLKS THINKING WILL CHANGE.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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