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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some would argue that male and female students should be taught in different schools, while others say that they get more advantage if they are allowed to attend the mixed schools. While separate schools
maintains
Suggestion
maintain
 the distance between boys and girls as per
cultural demand
Suggestion
the cultural demand
 in some countries, I believe that children better understand the opposite gender's wishes and values when they learn together in the same tuition. On the one hand, separate teaching institutions help a country to maintain the distance between different genders as defined by some traditions. It says that boys and girls should not engage with each other in order to control the emotions of young children and teenagers that significantly change while growing up.
For example
, most Arabic countries practice
this
 system as it is a part of their culture.
However
, I believe that
this
 system makes them shy and they cannot understand each other's wishes.
On the other hand
, both gender's children get equally
benifited
financial assistance in time of need
benefited
benefitted
 by studying in the same tuition because they get to know each other's
preferences
Suggestion
preference
 properly.
This
 is to say that children themselves deal with the physical changes that they are facing and gain more confidence in interacting with individuals of different genders.
For instance
, most
european
of or relating to or characteristic of Europe or the people of Europe
European
 countries have mixed schools,
hence
 they both are confident enough to interact and respect one-another.
Therefore
, I think it is more advantageous to teach pupils of different sex in the same school. In conclusion,
although
 separate schools help some nations to keep the cultural demand in the right order, I believe children of different genders know one- another more properly while learning in the mixed schools.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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