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Some people think that it is best to live in a vertical city (mean that people work and live in high buildings) while others think a horizontal city is better. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

#people #city #work #buildings
While many believe in vertical cities as the best choice for urban living, others think that a
city
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A city
City
The city
 which is horizontally developed is much better.
Although
 I agree with the latter position,
this
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This
 essay will analyse both views. There are reasons why many opt for vertical cities.
To begin
 with, they feel a sense of community when sharing a space with others.
Further
, many people now prefer living in a home where everything is laid out on a single floor plan as they see managing an apartment is less stressful than a house.
Finally
, many countries simply do not have space to build horizontal cities. Singapore is a prime example; in
this
city
 state, people see
highrises
used of buildings of many stories equipped with elevators; tall
high-rises
high rises
 as an optimal option that marries the needs of both
residence
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residential
 and green spaces.
However
, I am convinced that horizontal
city
 is better for a number of reasons.
Firstly
,
this
way
how something is done or how it happens
Way
 of urbanisation is more sustainable as it frees people from the stress of living in a concrete jungle (
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.e.
a
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A
 vertical
city
).
Secondly
, developing a horizontal
city
 helps minimise the level of destruction when a
city
 is hit by
manmade
not of natural origin; prepared or made artificially
man-made
 or natural disasters
such
 as September 11 attacks or earthquakes.
Thirdly
, if
megacity
 and skyscrapers become nothing but an obsession, it is certainly not a good trend. Environmentally speaking,
this
 trend poses an immense pressure on the world's increasingly scarce resources when resources are consumed in massive amounts to power these
glass
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glasses
 walled buildings, let alone the greenhouse gas emissions during the building process. In conclusion, though developing vertical cities is an inevitable trend, I would campaign for
horizontal
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Horizontal
 cities as a sustainable future for urban development.
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