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Some people believe that children should spend all their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, it can be argued that children
to spend
Suggestion
spend
 their all free
time
 with
thier
of them or themselves
their
 family or with other activities. In my opinion, it would be good for children to expend their all spare
time
 individually or with their friends. There are several reasons for children why being with their family is necessary in their spare
time
.
Firstly
, there may be young children who
does not have
Suggestion
do not have
 parents in the world, unfortunately. So, children who have parents should enjoy every moment that they passed together.
Secondly
, there may be young children whose school
is located
Suggestion
are located
 far away from home. With
this
, they and their parents may miss each others.
Thirdly
, when young children do have some free
time
 they can get advice from their family members if they have problems with their studies.
On the other hand
,
firstly
, I believe that children should spend all their
time
 with reading books, learning something new.
This
 can be the basement of the future career and make finding a job
more easier
Suggestion
easier
 after finishing university or college.
Secondly
, if they expend their spare
time
 with playing various types of games with their friends, they can enjoy their past
time
. To conclude, spending free
time
 with family may be necessary for children, but expending all spare
time
 may become negative. So, it is better for them to spend it individually or with friends.
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