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the chats below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adult between 20 and 50 years of age.

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The bar
chart
 and pie
chart
 provide information about a survey's consequence of the primary
exercise
 objectives and where people
exercise
 for a group of adult people who aged between 20 to 50 years.
overall
Suggestion
Overall
, there are five main goals of
exercise
 which adult likes to do it in different percentages.
However they
Accept comma addition
However, they
 prefer different locations to do
this
exercise
. The bar
chart
 illustrates the main aims of the exercises. Recreation rate was about 40 %, which get the highest percentage among all aims. Muscle toning had
got
Suggestion
gotten
 25 % more than the weight loss, mood improvement and disease prevention that ranged between 10% to 15% approximately.
Next
chart
 is a pie
chart
 that gives information about some locations to make exercises. Gyms sector accounted for 35 % of people. Public sports venues,
play grounds
an area where many people go for recreation
playgrounds
 and other public places were 15 %. While park had gotten 20 %.

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