Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, online selling and buying become popular among people. People love to buy books, grocery products and booking tickets
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has some advantages and some disadvantages, but
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moreover, it
moreover it
is brings
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brings
has brought
convenience to people. Things become
easy
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easier
by the use of the
internet
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. And it is a big plus for the inventor of the it because they made things easier shopping,
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
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ticket
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or book we needed to go out for even to look for the exact one we need to find the bigger
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place, but
now the
internet
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made it easy everything in your phone now it is easier to buy a book or grocery products online just in a
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by the tips of fingers.
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is a good development in human history I agree that
internet
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helps us a lot in our daily life and save our time.
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However it
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has some negative sides
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is that it makes people lazy to go out for a walk because everything is in
phone
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the phone
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Before when I needed to buy a
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I needed to find
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a trusted agent
to buy my
ticket
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even for checking
ticket
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I needed to contact
agent but
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agent, but
now
internet
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made it easy anytime anywhere we can buy
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, Grocery and Books
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It
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It's
a good point for students and book lovers. I love to buy books online and obviously it is better for online
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booking. In conclusion, I agree that the advantages of
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internet
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the internet
and online shopping are more than disadvantages.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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