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Some poeple think that teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that the adolescent
phase
 of
life
 is the happiest, while others believe that grown up people have the happiest of lives.
Although
, new adults are free from any burdens of
life
 and are excited to
adapt
choose and follow; as of theories, ideas, policies, strategies or plans
adopt
 new changes, I believe that mature adults are completely free to make decisions of their lives despite the
life
’s responsibilities. On the one hand, people in the age of 13 to 19 years are ecstatic with new physical and social changes. It is because when the transitional
phase
 begins
from
Suggestion
with
 a child to an adult, it brings a lot of excitement for new changes of
life
 in every aspect, without having to shoulder any responsibilities.
For example
, in a recent survey
in
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at
 Queen’s University, it was found that maximum people consider adolescent age as the most exciting time without any burdens.
However
, I believe that teenage
life
 is still hindered by other’s decisions for them.
On the other hand
, a fully grown person is considered the happiest, as they are capable of deciding what they want without having to take permissions. It is because they are mature and responsible enough to tackle situations and can choose between right and wrong, which gives them a sense of freedom and happiness.
For instance
, according to a report of The
Heralds
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Herald
Herald's
 newspaper, adult
life
 is full of contentment and independence, not found in any other
phase
 of
life
, except the toddler stage. I believe that,
matureness
the quality of being natural or based on natural principles
naturalness
 comes with happiness. To conclude,
however
, juvenile
phase
 of
life
 is considered to be an enthusiastic time about the new changes of
life
, far away from
burdens
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the burdens
 of being an adult, but I believe that grown-up person
are
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is
 merrier ones with complete liberation to live the
life
 they want to, despite the responsibilities they shoulder.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • teenage years
  • responsibilities
  • free time
  • stress
  • social life
  • intense friendships
  • first loves
  • new adventures
  • exhilarating
  • invincibility
  • optimism
  • sense of accomplishment
  • fulfillment
  • career achievements
  • personal growth
  • financial independence
  • passions and interests
  • lasting relationships
  • parenthood
  • emotionally stable
  • maturity
  • life experience
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