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In some areas of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion on this?

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Unforeseen events, social disturbances keep on happening in the cities. And to control the showcase of public anger, government keeps on imposing
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 from time to time. In
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 state, teenagers are not allowed to go out alone after some particular point at night unless they are being accompanied by an adult. Considering human safety, I totally agree with
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 imposition.
Curfew
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 can be imposed for different reasons. Most commonly, when people of nation do not agree with the government's decisions, to control their anger, it is being imposed.
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, In India, recently, a Citizenship Amendment bill has been passed. Indians are not happy with that bill,
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 they are opposing it. So to control the human show of anger, and to maintain harmony in nation, police has imposed
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 in various parts of the country.
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, the government can impose
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 due to safety concerns. For instant, if there is a terror attack in any part of the city,
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 it will be imposed in that part of the city. So that no human being is being harmed, as there will still be danger of more attacks. In the state of
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, teenagers and children should not go out of doors, as there is potential risk involved in getting them being hurt.
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, they can go out under some supervision by an adult. It helps them in keeping safe. It is for their own safety, that
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 rules are being made.
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, they should abide by these rules. In conclusion, I totally agree with teenagers not being allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night, when the
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 is being imposed. It is vital for their own protection.
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, the guardians at home will be calm, knowing that they are not alone outside.

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