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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved in a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally.Discuss both sides and give your opinions.

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In most cases we see that many people think environmental issues must be solved globally, but for others’ opinion, these problems have to be
deal
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dealt
 with by individual governments as local issues. I consider that environmental problems cover all
surface
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surfaces
 of the World and these problems must be solved in global scale. Perhaps, the main reason why people are in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of thought of global solution to environmental problems is because environment surrounds all members of the World and concern all people, so I agree. Many factors which lead to environmental problem are mainly related
with
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to
 pollution that appears from consuming power of people. Due to enlargement of human society, wasteful goods and hazardous
matters
the tangible substance that goes into the makeup of a physical object
materials
 which make pollution increase.
This
 case occurs all over the World, but somewhere in heavier form.
For example
, atmosphere of mega cities and industrial cities is wealthy with different dangerous chemical gases. Despite
this
 argument there is
also
 a case for the idea that environmental issues which appear in the border of country concern government individually. Some people consider environmental problems as
local issue
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a local issue
 and according to their thought government has
to be eliminate
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eliminated
 these problems to protect
surroundings
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the surroundings
. More precisely, countries which
has
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have
 heavy industry,
such
 as oil refinery, have to deal with clearing of polluted areas. Implementation of
this
 process may be organized on the bases of national laws or codes.
Although
 people
varying
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vary
 in their opinions, I believe environmental problems have to be dealt with globally because everyone lives in
environment
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the environment
an environment
 and we are
dutiable
that can be given a date
datable
 to protect it.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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