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Some people believe that entertainers are more important than scientists? Do you agree or disagree? Support with reasons and examples from your own experience

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I really disagree with the
pharase
an expression consisting of one or more words forming a grammatical constituent of a sentence
phrase
phrases
fares
 that entertainers and scientists, I feel scientists has more importance than entertainers as they works with
high degree
Suggestion
a high degree
 of responsibility and have to answer in case of any failure. Scientists
works
Suggestion
work
are working
 as a team for achieving a goal and they work as their duty towards human, country or any other responsible body. Suppose, a group of scientists is working on one
mission
 they
works
Suggestion
work
 day and night for success of the
mission
.
e
Suggestion
E
.g.
the
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The
 Moon
mission
 is
real one
Suggestion
a real one
 which is recently
happned
Suggestion
happening
happened
 and partially successful, still whole of the world
was had
Suggestion
had
 an eye on it. But,
on the other hand
 entertainer do not have any responsibility towards any one. They, works for their own benefits and even if they do not perform they do not have to
anwer
react verbally
answer
 to anyone. Even if, their
mission
/ goal is
failed that
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failed, that
 will be only some financial loss. Their main work is to entertain the public and that decision of failure and success is in the hands of them.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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