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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As we can notice that the automation industry is playing a crucial
role
 in our lives. With more advancement, the industrial science will replace many resources which are going to be extinct. Today, our world is going through severe calamities. At
first
, it can be
envisage
Suggestion
envisaged
 that these problems may be overcome by our
advance
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advanced
technology
,
however
, in my point of view I believe that depending only on
technology
 is not going to be sustainable for a long period. From past many years, the scientists are working to reduce our major environmental problem
such
 as carbon emission which is causing
to increase
Suggestion
increasing
 in global temperature. Being said that, the
technology
 only can not help to deal with
this
 issue. Everyone has to participate in order to achieve the desire goals.
For example
, the scientists
has recently worked
Suggestion
have recently worked
 with the
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
 around the world to form an agreement which states that every country has to take part in the goal to reduce the carbon emission by two percent by 2050.
This
examplify
be characteristic of
exemplifies
 that the
role
 of human is as important as the
technology
.
Another
Suggestion
Other
 important issues which
is
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are
 indirectly related to our climate is fast paced development of countries which are emitting the natural resources
such
 as plants and forests.
For instance
, many countries in order to achieve their desire
gdp
Suggestion
GDP
 do manufacture on a very large scale, due to which many livestocks is being affected. It should be considered that the natural resources are limited and should be
use
Suggestion
used
 appropriately to save our climate and
exo
Suggestion
Exo
-system. To summarise, I believe that the
role
 of
technology
 in solving environmental issues is as important as the
role
 of individuals in the society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental problems
  • technology
  • solve
  • reduce
  • pollution levels
  • renewable energy sources
  • waste management systems
  • sufficient
  • human behavior
  • consumption patterns
  • collaboration
  • policy-making
  • essential
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