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Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with the statement?

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In recent times, high cost of scientific
medicine
 has made people to lean towards
usage
Suggestion
the usage
 of traditional forms of drugs. Alternative forms of
medicine
 are believed to be less productive and deadly because they contain acidic contents and has no regular prescription in their usage.
However
, their reliability in
treatment
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the treatment
 of some certain ailments and being
major source
Suggestion
a major source
the major source
 of
medicine
 for our ancestors are factors that prove the statement
otherwise
. Research done on various species of traditional herbs reveals that they contain highly poisonous contents. Most of these herbs’ constituents are concentrated
acids which
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acids, which
 are deadly to human body cells.
Also
, irregular and improper prescription of these medicines is another reason for its inefficiency.
This
 usually leads to overdose intake of the
medicine
 which has
negative effect
Suggestion
a negative effect
negative effects
 on its recipient.
Thus
, low immune system is seemed to be one of the effects of excessive intake of drugs.
On the contrary
, traditional medicines are sometimes the
last
 hope of some patients. There are certain illness and diseases that can only be cured by administering herbs. Epilepsy,
for instance
, has no cure
scientifically but
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scientifically, but
 there are cases of its total healing by the use of traditional medicines.
Besides
, our great ancestors are typical evidence of alternative
medicine
 efficacy. In Africa,
for example
, before the advent of civilization, herbs were the only source of medicines and there are records and stories of its effectiveness.
Although
 these stories are believed by some to be just a fairy tale. Putting all these together, I partially agree with the statement that traditional medicines are poisonous and ineffective. The thoughts of it being the only source of medicines for our ancestor and its efficacy in treating pockets of ailments seem not hold water.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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