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Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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administration
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administrations
lay
set down according to a plan
laid
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peoples
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peoples'
 tax on coaching a single
person to achieve in
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person to achieve
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game whereas
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game, whereas
 a fair portion of citizens think that these
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amounts
 must be paid out
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 the plan which are well being for the common people. I believe on expending the large amount of citizens toll on the projects that are useful for the public
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 on coaching a single national sportsman
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view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
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 paragraph. On the
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 hand, in allocating the money on instructing a single sportsman can accomplish in the world level competitions and bring pride to the nation.
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 encouragement can be a motivation for the future
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applying to all or most members of a category or group
generals
general's
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 to come forward in the competitive games and succeed in their life.
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, laying out the capital on the scheme which are more advantage
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of
 the common people will lead to the development of the country. Investing
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in
 the infrastructure and
contempory
characteristic of the present
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 technology will improve the trades in the world,
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, it provides
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jobs
 to the unemployment as well as decrease the poverty
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, authorities issuing the fund on the construction of the several hospitals and schools will be generally convenient for the citizens as well as the unemployment is reduced. To sum up, I agree that the
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peoples'
 tax must be invested on the beneficiary of public which moves the country in developing path rather than expending on the sportsman to make the nation proud.

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