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Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree

#people #children #leisure #activities #waste #time
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Now a day in
this
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 busy world most of the parents are busy with their work and no enough
time
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 for children.
Hence
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, they spend their
time
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 with
disregular
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 activities and wasting their
complete
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completion
time
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. Children are
forgeting
lose (s.th.) or lose the right to (s.th.) by some error, offense, or crime
forfeiting
 their right path and spend
time
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in
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on
 waste activities due to
same things
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the same things
. As per my suggestion, people should allow their dependents to be occupied with
leisure
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 activity part of the education.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 that they will not garbage their
time
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 and properly utilize in other activities in their
leisure
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 period. It helps
to
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for
 children to get the valuable outer knowledge, spend
time
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 with the same age children, make friends
,
Accept space
,
communicate with other children and
etc
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 for their future. Children can spend their
time
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 on same where they want to involve and it helps them to grow in that area in future. Due to lake of
time
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 for the parent,
children
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children, leisure
leisure
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 activities are most important as like as education and each and every school management should give
ore
introduces an alternative
or
 provision to
leisure
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 activities than education in school so that children will enjoy each and every moment and apart from that
childern
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child
children
 will explore more things rather than study materials. It helps them to get
idea
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an idea
the idea
on
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of
 outer knowledge.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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