Description of two pie charts showing online sales of retail sectors in cañada

The given two pie charts provide information about the percentages of online sales in Canada for different retail sectors. The data
was collected
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were collected
in years 2005 and 2010. Overall, in the beginning of period video games contributed least in Canadian retail sectors while electronics and appliances
was
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were
the most significant online sales sector in retail.
However
, at the end of the period, the food and beverages became the largest sales segment
for
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of
retail market
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the retail market
in Canada whereas the lowest contribution was made by home furnishings. It is obvious from the given figures that the online sales of video games
was
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were
18% in 2005 which was increased by 23% in 2010. A similar effect was observed in case of food and beverages which showed a rise of about 10% in 2010 with
average sales
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an average sales
of 32% compared to that of 22% five years back in 2005.
On the other hand
, electronics and
appliances
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appliance
industry illustrated a downward trend from 2005 to 2010 when its sales fell from 35% to 30%.
Similarly
, home furnishing was the retail
sector which
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sector, which
also
depicted 10% reduction in its sales when the data showed that the sales were 25% in 2005 but declined to 15% after
period
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a period
of five years.
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