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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Now a day most of the
country
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 has a free
health
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service
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 and the rest of the
country
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 should have a free
health
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service
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 for their
country
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 residents Each and every person should have a
health
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 card to get cured in
time
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 from common diseases, flues and virus as due to population and
gobal
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
global
 warming, frequently people are having some different kind of flues and It troubles them
lot
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a lot
 if they will not do
treatment
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 in
time
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 and later on it become their death
als
to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
as
 well.
Its
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It's
 not feasible for each and every resident to do the
treatment
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 in
time
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 due to financial situation
so
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so, moreover
moreover
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, if they have
health
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card
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card, then
then
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 they can easily admit in the hospital to cure from theses
dieases
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
diseases
. As per my suggestion every
country
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 should have free
health
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service
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, even if
this
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 means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the
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service but
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service, but
 common people can get benefited and make the
treatment
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 on
time
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 of common
health
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issues as
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issues, as
 usually most of the
coutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
 are charging tax from the people and based on that same
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country
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country's
goverenment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
governments
 should look after people's common
health
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 issues.
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then
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Then
 government can save around 20% of the
people
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person's
 life who were dead due to
this
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 common
health
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 issues like flues, viral fever, dengue etc. Apart from that
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should think
on
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about
 the latest medical treatments for the common people so that they will get benefited for the expensive treatments. As per my suggestion,
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Country ruling party
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the Country ruling party
a Country ruling party
 should export general medicines for the expensive
treatment
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 inside the
country
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instead
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 of exporting expensive medicines from outside
country
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 that
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 will save their revenue and as well as
also
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 save their
country
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 peoples life by using general medicine within the free
health
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service
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.
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