In the modern world it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

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In the world of today, some people are of the opinion that animals should no longer be used and killed for food, fashion or medical industries. I find
this
idea partly
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idea, partly
agreeable as there is still a need to
use
animals in different purposes of life. On the one hand, people have their valid points to prove for the unnecessarily of killing and abusing animals for industries. It is undeniable that the world is significantly developing and we have found alternative ways to produce food.
For instance
, scientist recently have come up with
plan
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a plan
the plan
-based
meat
and artificial
meat
that contains an equal amount of nutrition,
such
as fat, protein or vitamins, compared to regular
meat
. If we can produce and expand the
use
of
this
invention in mass scale, butchers and cattle will no longer be needed and animals can have their free lives like they used to have before in the ecosystem, and actually deserves for that. Regarding the aspect of clothing production, using artificial fabrics from plants and chemicals for daily clothes has been increasingly popular. In fact, not only man-made garments are sustainable to
use
, but it is
also
has definitely better outlook, in comparison with ones made from animals’ fur and skin. Concerning the medical perspective, Artificial Intelligent has been largely developed to a level that it can help humans
to
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with
analysis and evaluate side effects and the safety level;
therefore
, animal testing is unnecessary.
Furthermore
, traditional medicines made from animals like cobra or rhino’s horn have been proved by specialists and scientists to be useless and have no actual benefits.
On the other hand
, animals are still useful to be
use
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used
to produce products serving human daily lives.
First
of all,
meat
-eaters make up 70% of the world population, so a ban on killing animals for
meat
seems to be unreasonable.
Also
, as if millions of butchers and cattle were not allowed to milk their cash cows, they would be pushed
to
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into
unemployment with millions of people losing their job and being unable to make end meets.
Next
, in the fashion industry, some areas with extreme weather like North America or African still need to
use
animals’ skin
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the animals’ skin
and fur to prevent themselves from the deadly cold and hot weather.
For example
, in Canada,
although
people are aware of the cruelty of killing
gooses
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geese
for fur to make winter jackets, they still have no choice but using it, due to its irrefutable effectiveness.
Lastly
, in the medical aspect, there is no doubt that animal testing is still necessary as it helps
human
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humanity
to ensure that new treatments are safe to
use
with no side effects or risks. It is undoubtedly true that humans should be prioritized over animals and it is better to have an animal suffer, rather than a human to die. In conclusion,
although
abusing animals for the production of food, clothing and medicine are considered to be cruel, we still need to keep doing it as humans’ lives still depend heavily on those activities.
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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