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The importance of biodiversity is being more widely recognized as increasing numbers of species come under threat. What can be done to maintain biodiversity?

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Today, the number of
species
 under extinction threat is increasing and
that is
 showing us the importance of
biodiversity
.  Fortunately, it is not too late to maintain
biodiversity
. With small but effective changes we can save many
species
.
First
 of all, reducing the
water
 pollution can create a great relieve on
water
species
. According to the biologists, the 80 % of all existing creatures are living in the
water
.
Water
 Pollution is reducing the kinds and p
opulation
Suggestion
the population
of that creature day by day. Chemical and biological wastages are kept polluting fresh
water
 reserves and seas.
For e
xample every
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example, every
year a million gallon of polluted
water
 was discharged into the rivers and sea in Istanbul. Because, there were no sewer treatment facilities in Istanbul, the sea became too polluted and there was nearly no underwater life. After government decided and build sewer treatment facilities.
Water
 reserves and sea have become clearer and it has a great impact on
biodiversity
. Today curious eyes can even see the dolphins in there. Another caution for maintaining
biodiversity
 is forestation. T
oday most
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Today, most
of the land creatures are need forests for l
iving
Suggestion
a living
and forestation can create new living areas for many kinds of creatures, especially for mammals. The best example of it is the city of Abu Dhabi. İn the seventies, Emirate of Abu Dhabi decided to create a forest in the desert. After a well-organised forestation plan, they managed to create a forest and today it is a great attraction point to people who want to see the forest habitat. There are many kinds of creatures from mammals to endemic insects.
As a result
, today extinction is a great threat to many
species
. The pollution caused by people and deforestation causes great risks for many kinds of
species
.
On the other hand
, it is not too late for many of them. With small action, we can prevent the extinction of a lot of
species
 and we can maintain the
biodiversity
.

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