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More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think are some possible solutions?

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Now a day most of the people prefer purchasing cars rather than
bike
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 for the
first
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 time in developing countries. There is around more than 50% increase of cars purchasing in all over the world in
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 2 years and
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 all the developing countries like Canada, USA, UK, Australia and Russia
car
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 selling average is more than 70% as per the BCC calculation. Due to increase in purchase cars, people are facing lots of causes like global warming, Gas shortage, Traffic Jam and Accidents more oven most of the people lost their
life
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lives
 in road Accidents due to less knowledge of
car
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 driving skill and over speed driving. Now a
days
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day
 most of the kids
are
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also prefer
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 preferring
car
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 driving
instead
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 of
Bike
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 even without
licence
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a license
license
.
it
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It
 causes lots of the difficulties for them and their parent as well. Though everybody preferring
car
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 driving for their transportation so most of the time traffic jam has happened on the road and it may cause of lake of fuel in that country and in reverse fuel price has increased in that country. As per my opinion
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 up all people should not purchase cars for the
first
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 time and should ride
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bike
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bikes
instead
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 of
car
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.
later
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Later
 on,
once have
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once, have
on
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to
 experience on the
driving
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driving, then
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 should go for
car
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 purchase
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 parent should not allow their child for the
car
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 driving without
license
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a license
, it may stop losing their life’s in
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car accident
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a car accident
.
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 and not in the least people should use
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bike
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a bike
, local transport frequently
instead
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 of
car
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 driving and should stop
unnecessary
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an unnecessary car
car
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 driving if it manages with local transport or
bike
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 so that people will save money for their self and
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 avoid traffic jam as well.
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