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Some feel that school uniforms make schools safer for students, create a "level playing field" that reduces socioeconomic disparities and encourage children to focus on their studies rather than their clothes. Others say school uniforms infringe upon students' right to express their individuality, have no positive effect on behavior and academic achievement. Discuss both sides & give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.

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Many of us believe that educational institutes should make an attire mandatory at the premises.
This
 will create
equality feeling
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an equality feeling
 among the students as well as they will remain focused towards teaching rather than getting indulged in fashion at an early age. Whilst there are many who opined with another view that says uniforms do not have any impact. I
full
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fully
 concur with the former notion that defines the rule of clothing for each student. It is irrefutable to say that the standards of the person in society can be seen via the clothes they are wearing. And school is the place where one goes to gather knowledge and other traits that makes him
good human being
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a good human being
 to live in the society with harmony.
Thus
, donning the same type of clothes will give the
equality
Suggestion
equator
, that ought to be the essential criteria when they are
recieving
get something; come into possession of
receiving
 the enlightenment. It will not only save the poorer student from getting
inferiority complex
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an inferiority complex
 among other richer
student but
Accept comma addition
student, but
also
 teachers will be able to treat them
accordingly
 without looking at their social status.
On the other hand
, the schools in
US
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the US
, Canada and
mnay
a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'as' or 'too' or 'so' or 'that'; amounting to a large but indefinite number
many
 other countries do not
suppor
give moral or psychological support, aid, or courage to
support
 the dress code idea for the youngsters. In fact, it
has has
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
has
 been regarded as their right to showcase their personality. Even though, the juveniles cannot judge the social stature by
clothes but
Accept comma addition
clothes, but
 sooner or later they got involved
into
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in
 race of looking good that have always plummeted their key interest in studies. To sum up, to enforcing the dress code might take away the basic rights of an individual but its long term benefits are much more fruitful for him that can serve the society in
much better way
Suggestion
a much better way
.

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