Some people say that parents have the most significant influence in a child's development. However, other say that things like television or friends have the must important influence on them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Few
humans
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human
human's
opinion that, mother and father have the much better access in baby's improvement. Whereas, some people say that electronic gadget and peers have crucial importance on them.
Therefore
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, ahead of my opinion and both the views are discussed
further
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.
To begin
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with, parents have
most important role
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a most important role
the most important role
to develop kids.
Guardian
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The guardian
have
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has
to teach them very well,
such
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as: polite
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, social communication and so on.
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, when children's do get not
good score
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a good score
in exams, perhaps, parents have must
encouraged
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encourage
them and teach them how to improve marks in the
particulars
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particular
subjects. Because, they have
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also passed through
this
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situation.
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, they teach how to speak with
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an elderly person
elderly people
elderly persons
the elderly person
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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