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Some people think that high salary is important when choosing a company to work for,while others think that good working atmosphere is more important.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is irrefutable that in past people give more preference to the
quality
 of
work
 rather than high
salary
 as compare to nowadays.
Therefore
, majority of masses think that high
salary
 is more important rather than good working atmosphere. While others opposite with
this
 view.
However
,
this
 easy will discuss both contradictory arguments and
also
 present my own opinion in the conclusion. On one hand, people give more preference to high wages due to some reasons.
Firstly
, some person thinks it is difficult to complete own fundamental needs with low
salary
 so they do not satisfied with little income.
Secondly
, many people feel better when they earn more because of their expensive needs.
For instance
, my uncle who is a doctor, his
job
 is too much difficult but they feel better because they earn more money from
this
job
. All in all, these are the reasons why so Plople thinks that the high earning is more important rather than the
quality
 of the
work
.
On the other hand
, few masses believe that the good
quality
 of peace
work
 is more beneficial as compared to its
salary
.
Moreover
, people find it interesting to do
such
 type of
job
 which provide good atmosphere. Because they feel good when they doing nice
work
.
Furthermore
, if a person is interesting to do the
job
,
then
 one can achieve goals through hard
work
 and earn more due to promotions. For these reasons, it is evident that good type of
work
 is necessary than high
salary
. In conclusion,
although
 a few individuals give more importance to the high
salary
. But I would like to consider is that the
quality
 of
work
 is more important.
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